SSS: June 17 #sixsunday

16 Jun

What better way is there to close out a great beach-week than to post six sentences for all of you to enjoy?  This week’s snippet comes from my second book, Flight Risk.  This scene is taken from Evelyn Ryan’s inconvenient reunion with her old flame, country music artist Jaxon Lee.

After a ten-year absence, Evelyn Ryan returns to Nashville with her boyfriend, Will—who knows very little of Evelyn’s past.  During the visit, Evelyn is confronted by friends she once knew and the love she had abandoned.   

* * *

“Oh, I’ve missed you and your sweet innocence, Evie.” 

The feigned sincerity in Jaxon’s words made me snort.  “I highly doubt that,” I sneered, pulling from his sweltering grasp.  My arm pulsed where his fingertips had grazed the sensitive skin; it was like my heart had relocated to the spot so it could be closer to him.

“Why?” he challenged, quickly masking the hurt in his voice.

“Maybe because it has been nine years since we were together—or maybe because you have a model ex-wife and a million different screaming fans calling your name every night.” 

* * *

Interested in participating in Six Sentence Sunday?  All you need to do is sign up and post six sentences from a WIP or published work!

Here are some of my favorites from 6/17: S.J. Maylee (a train six); Joyce Scarbrough (a lost-love six); Meg Benjamin (a Stetson six); Ruthie Knox (a “boring-banker” six); Donna Cummings (a puppy six–just as cute as it sounds); Diane Alberts (“try me” six)

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23 Responses to “SSS: June 17 #sixsunday”

  1. Wildcat's Wife June 16, 2012 at 11:33 pm #

    “ex-wife?” um… I sense there’s still some bitterness and old feelings between these two love birds. Love your line, “my heart had relocated to the spot…” Nice touch!

    • movingforeword June 17, 2012 at 8:41 am #

      You’re right, there is still some bitterness and old feelings between this pair! Thank you, WW!

  2. Alix Cameron June 17, 2012 at 12:33 am #

    I agree with Wild Cat’s Wife. Great six.

  3. Donna Cummings June 17, 2012 at 8:12 am #

    Wonderful six. Love the voice, and the “heart relocation” line is great. 🙂

  4. Paula Martin June 17, 2012 at 10:10 am #

    She is saying one thing, but feeling something very different, it seems.

    • movingforeword June 17, 2012 at 11:12 am #

      Exactly, Paula! She’s a mixed bag of emotions, for sure!

  5. Cara Bristol June 17, 2012 at 10:12 am #

    “It was like my heart had relocated to the spot so it could be closer to him.” Fantastic line. “Hearts” do a lot of thumping and clenching in romances — so nice to see different analogy.

    • movingforeword June 17, 2012 at 11:13 am #

      Thanks, Cara! I was going for something different that didn’t thump or clench. It’s nice to know the effort is appreciated 🙂

  6. S. J. Maylee June 17, 2012 at 11:33 am #

    So very intriguing! I love, love this –>it was like my heart had relocated to the spot so it could be closer to him. Fab 6.

  7. Sandra Sookoo June 17, 2012 at 12:04 pm #

    “…heart had relocated to be closer…” Nice!

  8. Monica Enderle Pierce June 17, 2012 at 1:25 pm #

    I agree with everyone, that’s a lovely and unique line (about her heart). Sounds like things could get messy very quickly here.

  9. siobhanmuir June 17, 2012 at 3:06 pm #

    I can taste her fury and her resistance to giving him anything. Great six, Jenny. 🙂

  10. Elin Gregory June 17, 2012 at 5:40 pm #

    This is very good. So much implied backstory.

    • movingforeword June 17, 2012 at 5:48 pm #

      Thanks, Elin! The backstory ends up creating the story… 🙂

  11. Joyce Scarbrough June 18, 2012 at 4:25 pm #

    I loved the heart relocation line too, but it’s the powerful undertones in this six that reach out and grab me. I absolutely adore unspoken emotions between two people with a history!

    • movingforeword June 18, 2012 at 5:43 pm #

      Thank you, Joyce! Their history really drives the narrative.

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